One afternoon three friends called Jane, Sivaenah and Madi went on a trip to the Carnival. They went to do fun games until they flew up high to the sky. It was called a hot air balloon. It was their first time to fly in a hot air balloon. Then they went to get ready to go play on all of the games.And it was fun going there Especially my favourite game was little Alchemy.
Hi,Sivaneah!!My name is Emily from Grey Main School!I like this post because it has a picture and a story.It reminds me of reading a book!!Did you enjoy posting this??Next time perhaps you could put a W.A.L.T. so people know what you were doing. Ka Kite for now.
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Hi Sivaenah, My name is Nova from Grey Main School :) I really like your Narrative Writing, The Picture is so realistic! I like the way you put a picture with your writing. I think you did a great job but maybe next time you could have a little bit more detail on the bit when you go on the hot air balloon otherwise it is great. It reminds me When I went on a hot air balloon ride at Pulltons Park in England.
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Hi Savannah my name is Neve I am from Grey Main School.
ReplyDeleteI love the way you have created it. The red is nice and bright. Maybe you can try doing paragraph's.This reminds me of when I went to Wellington. When I tried to read it maybe you can make it clearer.Next time you should tale me when you did it and why.That's all for now.