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Wednesday 30 May 2018

Narrative Writing

One afternoon three friends called Jane, Sivaenah and Madi went on a trip to the Carnival. They went to do fun games until they flew up high to the sky. It was called a hot air balloon. It was their first time to fly in a hot air balloon. Then they went to get ready to go play on all of the games.And it was fun going there Especially my favourite game was  little Alchemy.

3 comments:

  1. Hi,Sivaneah!!My name is Emily from Grey Main School!I like this post because it has a picture and a story.It reminds me of reading a book!!Did you enjoy posting this??Next time perhaps you could put a W.A.L.T. so people know what you were doing. Ka Kite for now.
    See you next time,
    EMILY

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  2. Hi Sivaenah, My name is Nova from Grey Main School :) I really like your Narrative Writing, The Picture is so realistic! I like the way you put a picture with your writing. I think you did a great job but maybe next time you could have a little bit more detail on the bit when you go on the hot air balloon otherwise it is great. It reminds me When I went on a hot air balloon ride at Pulltons Park in England.

    NOVA

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  3. Hi Savannah my name is Neve I am from Grey Main School.
    I love the way you have created it. The red is nice and bright. Maybe you can try doing paragraph's.This reminds me of when I went to Wellington. When I tried to read it maybe you can make it clearer.Next time you should tale me when you did it and why.That's all for now.

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